The Song With No Concept

Aloe · Post by **Aloe** » Tue Jul 03, 2007 1:22 pm

sup yall. been a minute since i've posted here. thought i'd drop a new(er) track of mine.

The Song With No Concept

www.myspace.com/aloemusic --> should be the top song

any feedback you got is appreciated.. positive or negative.. just holler at me.

Captin Planit · Post by **Captin Planit** » Wed Jul 04, 2007 1:05 pm

Drastic improvement with the production. Not perfect by any means, but you're at least starting to tailor your sound, and it's a lot more solid than the work you used to post in the past. The levels still need a lot of work, too. But at least everything is discernible, and you can vibe with this.

As far as the vocals, I dunno, the idea's alright, and the lyrics are solid, but it feels like there's a level of comfort missing. It's too static. Sounds too much like it jumped right off the paper on to the track. I suffer from the same shit. Get loose with it. I feel the same way about a lot of your other songs. Make 'em more human, and they'll be a lot better.

But good stuff, all the same.

ardamus · Post by **ardamus** » Thu Jul 05, 2007 9:47 am

hmmm, not bad. reminds me of The Grouch a little bit. not the beat or anything but i guess the approach to it.

Aloe · Post by **Aloe** » Thu Jul 05, 2007 4:26 pm

Planit,

thanks for the feedback.. i'll work on that.

ard... good lookin out. i actually know grouch from growin up as kids together, so ya, we probably do have a similar approach to tracks.

ill advice · Post by **ill advice** » Thu Jul 05, 2007 4:59 pm

Nice vibe,I would have added maybe a delay or reveb to the vocals to blend with the beat more, but I made it all they way through. Good shit son.

Aloe · Post by **Aloe** » Mon Jul 09, 2007 1:05 pm

thanks yo..

so your sayin add more of a reverb? cus i added some reverb to the vox already... but your right, i was tryin to make it mesh better with the beat.

what kind of delay would you suggest?

Funk Docta Bombay · Post by **Funk Docta Bombay** » Wed Jul 18, 2007 4:22 pm

First thing I thought when I heard this was "hmm, sounds like Hiero/LL Bay style stuff" and what do ya know, you're from the bay. haha

I think it works as a complete joint, the beat suits the vocals and vice versa for sure which isn't as obvious as it sounds. I agree with Planit that you're occasionally a bit mechanical on the mic, maybe a few extra drinks before you spit your next one will give it a loose feel.

My favorite part of the song is def the hook, catchy and it doesn't overpower the rest of the track, reminds me of the vibe I caught when I went out west last year.

Cool track in general, If there's one suggestion that I'd make is that it could use a second emcee for a verse. You've got a cool voice and it suits the beat but someone to complement you (or even do a back-n-forth rhyme with) would break up the track and keep peoples' attention.

Brazen · Post by **Brazen** » Mon Jul 30, 2007 5:15 pm

Digging the beat something serious. You sound good on this shit too. Flow is fresh. Can't critique this because it's an enjoyable listen. No need to be broken apart to try and force something to say lol.

Good shit fam...I'm gonna have to stay on the look for more shit. Keep it moving fam. one