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A better example of a Tanka (Japanese form of poetry)
"Reaching The Hilltop" by Carol Raisfeld
reaching the hilltop
I'm awed; a town tucked into
an emerald valley
and beyond, this azure sea
like some jewel sparkling
All of that 5-7-5-7-7 can only be applied to Tankas in their Japanese form...remember, the Japanese language is more syllabic than English therefore making it "easier" to apply this so-called "5-7-5" rule to Haikai (haiku) and "5-7-5-7-7" to Tanka.....I think!?
"Reaching The Hilltop" by Carol Raisfeld
reaching the hilltop
I'm awed; a town tucked into
an emerald valley
and beyond, this azure sea
like some jewel sparkling
All of that 5-7-5-7-7 can only be applied to Tankas in their Japanese form...remember, the Japanese language is more syllabic than English therefore making it "easier" to apply this so-called "5-7-5" rule to Haikai (haiku) and "5-7-5-7-7" to Tanka.....I think!?
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firehired gun wrote:Bright lights the Big City
White Stripes to P diddy
We like hype, set trends and down by committee
Gritty doin the thang inventin styles and slang
Only place hipsters and purple city bird gang can hang
in the same space
The birthplace of rap to pop
Made greats from Babe Ruth to Jean Michael Basquiat
The place if you're punk you had to rock CBGB's
Secure bikes usin kryponite and master locks
hired gun wrote:Bright lights the Big City
White Stripes to P diddy
We like hype, set trends and down by committee
Gritty doin the thang inventin styles and slang
Only place hipsters and purple city bird gang can hang
in the same space
The birthplace of rap to pop
Made greats from Babe Ruth to Jean Michael Basquiat
The place if you're punk you had to rock CBGB's
Secure bikes usin kryponite and master locks
Bad cops and Good thugs
Jersey hate and hood love
Nathan franks, Louie G's, late night at irish pubs
where you can get mugged standin out in broad day
Comedy and tragedy play on more then broadway
Where the tourist love to go and many more want to stay
But the poor forced to the cold cause the rents high to pay
remember
remember when i dismember, you the banned member with a weak membrane in a week youll be chem brain, after you pass the bio class, dip number two pencils fast, out last big league chew, crew rolling thick like chunky stew. dont boo me i be boo in your dreams, ghost with a tripple beam, spirit drinking spirits, hear it like right here, fear like driving on everclear, steer like deers in head lights, fight like a bucks cheerleader in milwaukee tights, treat you like night vision, gator skatboards been listed on ebay for the wall display skater mission, put me on the apple shelf cause i iRAQ, stack like gymnists back to back, pack like straps on rap cats with no gats and thats a fact
please join my stupid flow.
please join my stupid flow.
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Thats a fact or a matter of//my rhymes are hipster fresh like nintendo's power glove//before wii when it was all about mii//and my power pad that I had/dad would get mad cuz competetors were bagged like Glad//running game on track and field//virtual boy obstructing the field//casting dreams into the night//watching beams in pixelated light//before nights of fight//or thefts of autos//i go off like semi autos//even when my pilots set to auto//i bring it bad so even when my competitions money ther still lost like hurleys luck on the lotto
Mindbender Futurama at the battle
i gave him the drunken flow like i drank a fifth and with...
style spit emoticons in his face until i exceeded my bandwidth
he backed off, crowd was silent but i know they related
outta 10 id give myself a 12 and still underrated
he told me i suck...called me a faggot rhyme slacker
said my flows rough around the edge like a fuckin Ritz Cracker
but im the future of hip hop, i swear yo, its not dead
fuck the track, what no one know is im rap'n to the beat in my head
he thought to himself "yo what the fuck is this guy on??"
i read his mind and replied "ohword.com"
the crowd was on the fence until i used my spidey sense
and started flipping their past thoughts into present perfect tense
i told him he got a weak technique so to speak
he called me a geek so to be extra unique i flowed in ancient greek
they didnt know im a paranormal phenomenon
until they observed it first hand like Popa does Ramadan
born with a mic in my fingers...i call em antennas or feelers
as a side job i sell kicks to little kids like drug dealers
where i come from is farther than the farthest of fars
telleported to this planet from the big red rock Mars
got lost along the way and ended up on Jupiter
left cause compared to here... they thought i was even stupider
back to the battle, sorry for the side track
he started to attack the transformers patch on my back
warned him not to go there... but he crossed that line
so i summoned Megtron, El-P and my uncle Optimus Prime
then what happened?
style spit emoticons in his face until i exceeded my bandwidth
he backed off, crowd was silent but i know they related
outta 10 id give myself a 12 and still underrated
he told me i suck...called me a faggot rhyme slacker
said my flows rough around the edge like a fuckin Ritz Cracker
but im the future of hip hop, i swear yo, its not dead
fuck the track, what no one know is im rap'n to the beat in my head
he thought to himself "yo what the fuck is this guy on??"
i read his mind and replied "ohword.com"
the crowd was on the fence until i used my spidey sense
and started flipping their past thoughts into present perfect tense
i told him he got a weak technique so to speak
he called me a geek so to be extra unique i flowed in ancient greek
they didnt know im a paranormal phenomenon
until they observed it first hand like Popa does Ramadan
born with a mic in my fingers...i call em antennas or feelers
as a side job i sell kicks to little kids like drug dealers
where i come from is farther than the farthest of fars
telleported to this planet from the big red rock Mars
got lost along the way and ended up on Jupiter
left cause compared to here... they thought i was even stupider
back to the battle, sorry for the side track
he started to attack the transformers patch on my back
warned him not to go there... but he crossed that line
so i summoned Megtron, El-P and my uncle Optimus Prime
then what happened?
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Throw some D on that bitch (remix)
shootin like he on fire, dunn, kinda like a lighter son
killer cross, still ya tossed, you ain't no Iverson
Throw some D on that bitch, you ain't no Iverson
Throw some D on that bitch, you ain't no Iverson
Throw some D on that bitch
like Flip tell the pistons, kid
on the television, rip
you must be watching cable,
you better off dishin it
don't care how ya vision is
got ya game figured out like colombo
make a sequel to SWAT starring me and Mutombo
i don't need a drumroll
no need for introductions
you're sneaky sick
like "really, vick, how you gonna get dro past customs?"
ya weak ass, cussed them
without you dudes knowin
do it in a Spur of the moment
the brown bruce bowen
i'll make sure all you jocks is rocked
you got no skill and game
every one of my blocks is hot
and i'm not little wayne
what's worse, b
dont got a cross that's killin vs. me
cause the only time i'm on some bull shit
i rocked pippen jerseys
so listen fake,
i'm a man on a mission, mate
watch this player get locked down,
like adebisi on prison break
peep this homie stylin, but popa know he wylin
sittin back, crazy cat thinks he's kobe bryant
throw some D on that bitch, ain't no kobe bryant
throw some D on that bitch, ain't no kobe bryant
he might be dropping threes, just cause you knockin these
and making dunks, you fake the funk, you ain't Dominique
throw some D on that bitch, you ain't no Dominque
throw some D on that bitch, you ain't no Dominque
killer cross, still ya tossed, you ain't no Iverson
Throw some D on that bitch, you ain't no Iverson
Throw some D on that bitch, you ain't no Iverson
Throw some D on that bitch
like Flip tell the pistons, kid
on the television, rip
you must be watching cable,
you better off dishin it
don't care how ya vision is
got ya game figured out like colombo
make a sequel to SWAT starring me and Mutombo
i don't need a drumroll
no need for introductions
you're sneaky sick
like "really, vick, how you gonna get dro past customs?"
ya weak ass, cussed them
without you dudes knowin
do it in a Spur of the moment
the brown bruce bowen
i'll make sure all you jocks is rocked
you got no skill and game
every one of my blocks is hot
and i'm not little wayne
what's worse, b
dont got a cross that's killin vs. me
cause the only time i'm on some bull shit
i rocked pippen jerseys
so listen fake,
i'm a man on a mission, mate
watch this player get locked down,
like adebisi on prison break
peep this homie stylin, but popa know he wylin
sittin back, crazy cat thinks he's kobe bryant
throw some D on that bitch, ain't no kobe bryant
throw some D on that bitch, ain't no kobe bryant
he might be dropping threes, just cause you knockin these
and making dunks, you fake the funk, you ain't Dominique
throw some D on that bitch, you ain't no Dominque
throw some D on that bitch, you ain't no Dominque
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RacquetballGangsta
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the uncloaked boist'rous wisdom in broken sunsoaked voices
daffodils laugh and kill half a mill in the fertile crescent
vertigo words are peasants
present in a flock of birds, the pheasants
caressed in a bosom
to some, words are weapons
fela called music one
but a shoe on one foot
could be unheard, uneven
undreams could be deffered in heaven
yeah, i heard the devin
didnt feel the shit too tough
but i guess im a nerd, a pleasant
surprise is the only thing i wont despise
when it comes to reppin
hip hop in the present
u coulda served up seven
rappers, cola or uncola
and i wouldnt care one iota
or would that be an iotum?
my eyes owe you one when i dont look
like your audio book was the sun
yet from it i quote some
obscene verbal gesture
that i heard in ur lecture
given at conferences i wouldnt attend
if there was pussy to bend
at the door as a trap
it couldnt have been
someone less fine than scarlett or nat
portman, of course then
i had to abstain
my hat in the rain
ruined, thats what black men are doin
when theyre screwin those white women who been
around the block too many times
id rather beat around the bush
until the end of time
than drink from a cup of white wine
the deepest darkest reds
the boho sisters, dreads
and all the amenities,
are the ones worth befriending
scratching, squirting, and sinning
shootin in the shit hole, shouting obscenties
doubting virginity
eating out in the kitchen
homecooking at dinner
her mouth got me twitching
her pussy's a winner
a parka in winter
a breeze in the summer
she even discovers
new levels of freakness
when i skeet on the covers
vertigo words are peasants
present in a flock of birds, the pheasants
caressed in a bosom
to some, words are weapons
fela called music one
but a shoe on one foot
could be unheard, uneven
undreams could be deffered in heaven
yeah, i heard the devin
didnt feel the shit too tough
but i guess im a nerd, a pleasant
surprise is the only thing i wont despise
when it comes to reppin
hip hop in the present
u coulda served up seven
rappers, cola or uncola
and i wouldnt care one iota
or would that be an iotum?
my eyes owe you one when i dont look
like your audio book was the sun
yet from it i quote some
obscene verbal gesture
that i heard in ur lecture
given at conferences i wouldnt attend
if there was pussy to bend
at the door as a trap
it couldnt have been
someone less fine than scarlett or nat
portman, of course then
i had to abstain
my hat in the rain
ruined, thats what black men are doin
when theyre screwin those white women who been
around the block too many times
id rather beat around the bush
until the end of time
than drink from a cup of white wine
the deepest darkest reds
the boho sisters, dreads
and all the amenities,
are the ones worth befriending
scratching, squirting, and sinning
shootin in the shit hole, shouting obscenties
doubting virginity
eating out in the kitchen
homecooking at dinner
her mouth got me twitching
her pussy's a winner
a parka in winter
a breeze in the summer
she even discovers
new levels of freakness
when i skeet on the covers
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RacquetballGangsta
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Willow Weep For Me
this jazz is a mostly forgotten alive
winter when to forget is unknown to die
gentle wings suggest from now
an overmuch stretch that has ease how
some through clouds do shine and drift
noise can drag but rhythms dance to lilt
in simple terms or with a might I may
begin today, betray before, and venture more
to lose is to love a not assured
mountain rock where no falls astray
become like one--a broken day)
since clever time unends bright with dawn
winter when to forget is unknown to die
gentle wings suggest from now
an overmuch stretch that has ease how
some through clouds do shine and drift
noise can drag but rhythms dance to lilt
in simple terms or with a might I may
begin today, betray before, and venture more
to lose is to love a not assured
mountain rock where no falls astray
become like one--a broken day)
since clever time unends bright with dawn
Assuming this is serious, you seem to be getting closer to realizing your potential as one who could successfully combine boom bap stylistic '94-isms with lavendar dewdrop poesy and West Coast smack-a-hoe steez, and I'm having great fun reading this stuff. Now, can you kindly spend some time on the mic, recording this stuff, getting used to hearing your voice in playback, and figuring out how to make this work for the ears of listeners as well?
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RacquetballGangsta
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Well fuck what YOU heard, because this shit is dope, lolRacquetballGangsta wrote:thanx gents.
i actually dont like this shit at all now, looking at it.
but im glad u dig.
i was honestly just fuckin around.
as for recording, i do that once in a blue mooon. i have no equipment of my own, i just do joints with my homey when im over there.
If it's dope "on accident" why don't you flip something "on purpose" and record it you dumb motherfucker
Nacho, I'm down, if you're serious...
Coppin New York Knicks without losin a grip
Two for fives tellin lies to those cruisers and shit
Askin why we on the block tryin to bruise the swagger
Crews be Wild like them Horses just ask Mick Jagger
Gotta watch for traffic man I gotta warn ya
People knocked off the block and this aint california
The sun dont shine down the side of my building
Open heart surgery on the city plugged with fillings
Children left in shotgun seats people stare without no speech
Left there lyin in the streets an hour later without Police
Two for fives tellin lies to those cruisers and shit
Askin why we on the block tryin to bruise the swagger
Crews be Wild like them Horses just ask Mick Jagger
Gotta watch for traffic man I gotta warn ya
People knocked off the block and this aint california
The sun dont shine down the side of my building
Open heart surgery on the city plugged with fillings
Children left in shotgun seats people stare without no speech
Left there lyin in the streets an hour later without Police
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Warcolepsy
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i live up in this, sitcom where poverty is the premise
and its a jungle sometimes, but the concrete is endless
in a crumbling buildin, rats and roaches half the tenants
im focusin my attention on the skyline in the distance
sitting in my project window, breathing the wino piss in
shorty tucks in her pendant, she aint trying to be a victim
guiliani was campaigning, when niggas was going missing
they aint hearing us complaining, we already in the system
hypertension, dying from stress,.. aint got no health care
somebody save us, S.O.S., can we get some help here?
we still on wellfare, but aint no wealth here
its no economics, so no one really cares about our wellfare
the other side of borough, where the citizens skin aint all dark
people are trading stocks or eating hotdogs at the ball park
the finest clothes, the finest cuisine, shopping and eating,
we got crackers and potted meat, sleeping in streets, starving and bleeding
locked in a feeding tank where the order you eat is ranked
by the wages and fees you make getting over on those who can't
i'm hoping one of our neighbors comes a- knocking this christmas
gift'd up, with news crews to film the shit that they give us
You got us a turkey too?... somebody pinch us
i hope you feel good watching yourself granting wishes for us niggers
maybe one day, shit can be different....
if the editors slip and air a glimpse of our lives up in their pictures
and its a jungle sometimes, but the concrete is endless
in a crumbling buildin, rats and roaches half the tenants
im focusin my attention on the skyline in the distance
sitting in my project window, breathing the wino piss in
shorty tucks in her pendant, she aint trying to be a victim
guiliani was campaigning, when niggas was going missing
they aint hearing us complaining, we already in the system
hypertension, dying from stress,.. aint got no health care
somebody save us, S.O.S., can we get some help here?
we still on wellfare, but aint no wealth here
its no economics, so no one really cares about our wellfare
the other side of borough, where the citizens skin aint all dark
people are trading stocks or eating hotdogs at the ball park
the finest clothes, the finest cuisine, shopping and eating,
we got crackers and potted meat, sleeping in streets, starving and bleeding
locked in a feeding tank where the order you eat is ranked
by the wages and fees you make getting over on those who can't
i'm hoping one of our neighbors comes a- knocking this christmas
gift'd up, with news crews to film the shit that they give us
You got us a turkey too?... somebody pinch us
i hope you feel good watching yourself granting wishes for us niggers
maybe one day, shit can be different....
if the editors slip and air a glimpse of our lives up in their pictures
Slept On Fam: Audio Crack
ft. Wargasms, C-Gully, Configa and Arsenal.
Guest Apperances from Chino XL, AthenA, Estee Nack, DZK, Warbux, and Shiesty Crooks
took the bus to NY and its DC that I run from
in Brooklyn like, these Brooklynites, are now Crips and Bloods, son
at SOB's around these S.O.B.'s
this skitzo, kept me skepto on the metro, see....
I need to hit the record spots and fill up on some more crates
went to Fatbeats and my pockets lost more weight
Saw Talib as I looked with awe to see
tried to give him dap and he crossed the street
I saw a bum that was lost to me
talked about the twin towers
how he had smoked clog his eyes for 10 hours
then showered
in a bus station
I'm in Chinatown, almost starving for another crustacean
as I cuss waitin'
for the train, to link with the team
missed my spot, now I'm lost, yo, I think I'm in Queens
in Brooklyn like, these Brooklynites, are now Crips and Bloods, son
at SOB's around these S.O.B.'s
this skitzo, kept me skepto on the metro, see....
I need to hit the record spots and fill up on some more crates
went to Fatbeats and my pockets lost more weight
Saw Talib as I looked with awe to see
tried to give him dap and he crossed the street
I saw a bum that was lost to me
talked about the twin towers
how he had smoked clog his eyes for 10 hours
then showered
in a bus station
I'm in Chinatown, almost starving for another crustacean
as I cuss waitin'
for the train, to link with the team
missed my spot, now I'm lost, yo, I think I'm in Queens
"tim dog! i hope he's scamming bitches in heaven.." - EichTurner
i put my dick up in a bitches riches,
and then I switch it to theyre asshole,
bust a nut and run off with the cash yo.
almost an hour past as i started waxin that fat ass,
time droppin like dimes when this honey relax,
spittin facts right through the microphone and your dome,
quick for prose, quick to put my stick in your ho!
and then I switch it to theyre asshole,
bust a nut and run off with the cash yo.
almost an hour past as i started waxin that fat ass,
time droppin like dimes when this honey relax,
spittin facts right through the microphone and your dome,
quick for prose, quick to put my stick in your ho!
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theaggravatedjew
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Topic Cypher 6: Broke
Im on some bum shit.. man, I aint gonna lie
Check the trash then take a dumpster dive
Power out i say fuck it run the extension line
md2020 is my special occasion glass of wine
Never go for broke i just live it, excuisite
one pair of shoes but they look fresh, i did it
made from nothing, trailer parks what i lived in
brokes th e lifestyle on the bus to meet women
Check the trash then take a dumpster dive
Power out i say fuck it run the extension line
md2020 is my special occasion glass of wine
Never go for broke i just live it, excuisite
one pair of shoes but they look fresh, i did it
made from nothing, trailer parks what i lived in
brokes th e lifestyle on the bus to meet women